Critique a Short Story for a Video Game

Hello! I'd love to critique and proofread your short story for you! I'm a professional editor, proofreader and an author of short fiction. In a previous life I wrote articles/reviews for the video game industry and am still an avid gamer. Fiction I've edited includes books, short stories, children's books, a play and a video game script. The short stories I write usually fall within the fantasy, horror, and science fiction genres. Some of the things I edit for are grammar, tense, punctuation, spelling, capitalization, clarity, flow, consistency, word choice, formatting and more as the manuscript may require. I can get your work back to you within 2 days. I make all comments and editing marks using MS Word's Track Changes and Comments features. Please don't hesitate to contact me if you have any questions or if you'd like any additional information. Warm Regards, Kathleen Price

Hi and great thanks for inviting me to bid on your project! I believe that as a game artist with an education in international game architecture and design, I can proofread your story and provide some valuable tips and insights. Can you provide me with more details about the story from your end? Your thoughts and ideas behind it? Looking forward to hear from you, Marc

Hello, Thank you very much for your job offer. I have read the description, and have the skills necessary for this project. I have taken university-level classes on topics such as English, Documents, Languages, etc. and am a native English speaker with excellent English skills, as shown by the test scores. I have experience doing professional projects in this area. I also enjoy doing this type of work a lot, and always work accurately, carefully, efficiently, and with attention to detail. If you have any other questions, please pm me. Thank you again. Sincerely, Eric Schiefelbein

Hello. Thank you for your invitation to bid on this project. I wouldn't mind doing it but I really do not have much time at the moment, I will only be available from next week. If you don't mind waiting Iwill do it next week Monday. I would love this job as I have proofread and translated this kind of project previously and really like doing it, but cannot commit to something I cannot deliver on time. Thanks anyway! Marie

Your “lovely woman” is going to go away for a while. She wanted me to tell you that she is leaving because she loves you. If you want to find her, she says look to the stars. She’ll be there forever. I am her friend and you’re the same, so as a friend, perhaps you will understand that her heart is broken. Perhaps when you get home tonight, you might play the piano for me. Then I would know everything was okay. I know it’s not though…I am dying inside, my heart is aching for the music of you, but I sense that the last note has been played and that this is the end.

Hello there ! I am a french native student with strong capacities in both English and French. I will produce high quality, handmade proofread content in both languages. I am also an efficient and conscious translater who will deliver valuable work in time. Having read your work, I would say this is a pretty interesting project. I've worked on similar short projects, namely for a website that sells connected wristband. I've already downloaded your documents and I am ready to proofread them and suggest some improvements. Anyway, I am new on Freelancer and also new on Fiverr. However, you can check my Slightlyvoltair profile on Fiverr as I have pretty good reviews over my recent works. Best regards Paul

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So, normally I have a blurb that I copy and paste that tells you about all of the content writing experience I have and how much voice action experience I have and so on. But not this time. Initially I wanted to bid for this project because I'm a gamer. I think games are a great way to keep the brain active and thinking cognitively. Then... I read the outline for your story. Wow. I think it is great that you want to make a video game that teaches a very important life lesson. I offered a low bid because I think this project is a great idea and I would love to take part in it.