Text to advertise a financial service

We need a text to advertise on LinkedIn a financial service that allows companies to buy equipment for their business. This text will then be inserted inside an animation, like a cartoon, The Equipment are digital displays for advertisement (DOOH: digital out-of-home) and for retail stores. We need to write the text/script that describe this "equipment financing" and the text has to fit for a storyboard for an animation. Our target audience are CFO and purchase managers of big corporations that are Media DOOH Companies and large retailers. This is a draft of the text, but feel free to ask more question to understand how this service it works and how to find better wording/sentences: " GDS adds a new service for its customers: G+Credit G+Credit helps customers bring forward their investment in new Digital Signage Display Systems. • Strategic assets are acquired and deployed immediately • Enhancing revenues and profits • Getting ahead of the competition • Paid out of normal operational cash flows How does it work? G+Credit is neither lease nor finance, it is Supplier Credit, provided by GDS, uniquely in the Digital Displays marketplace. Loved by Finance Directors G+Credit has no detrimental impact on your balance sheet. In fact, approval for G+Credit may actually improve your credit ratings. G+Credit is the exciting new facility from GDS, available for approved projects now. Key advantages and features: • 2-5 years payment terms. • Quarterly / half yearly installments • First installment after 6 months • Funding amount up to 85% of project cost • No need to self-finance – you pay GDS out of normal operating cash flow • No consumption of your Capex budget nor increased financial indebtedness • No impact on your Net Financial Position (NFP) • Increased operating profit from your digital signage investment • Improves the Equity Value of your company " In short: GDS’s financing package allow to implement the investment right now, anticipating the competitors, and the next strong recovering of the economy and cash flow. Infact, this is what we can offer , 24-60 months payment on 4 or 6 months installments with the first one after 6 months. So , let’s make the investment now , the customer don’t pay for it now, the customer will start to pay after 6 months from delivery In the end we believe that the stronger sentence is that this formula allow to boosts the Equity Value as result of the operation profit ( EBITDA ) generated by the investment with no financial liability. we believe every body is interested to hear how to increase the EqV of his company